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The Equal Importance of Inner and Outer Efforts

At the moment, there is a heated discussion whether the influence from parents are more significant than the outer space. In my opinion, I suppose that the education from parents could be essential to children, while the hard work or other qualities could also be supportive.

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The enlightenment in young age could really help children build a higher starting point. Parents personal tutor in some basic subjects could help children understand basic knowledge more effectively, for which the children could find it more understandable to have a further study in various subjects which are complicated to cope with. For instance, if a child could know what are the nouns and adjectives in Chinese then learning the grammar of English could be much more easier. Therefore, it is useful for children to have some positive influence by parents.

Otherwise, positive qualities and outer education could also be important for children's success. As the old saying goes, a genius is successful because of 99% hard work and 1% gift. Without the struggling of the children themselves, nothing would come. For instance, there was a gifted child zhongyong who has had great talent when he was at a young age, nevertheless, he was sent out to make money to the relatives without any study. After years, he became an average person without any skill. Therefore, hard work could be another point of great in importance.

In conclusion, the domestic education as well as the outer expansion from children themselves could be equally important as well. Both of them could not be ignored in the development of children.

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