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Today,some policemen are required to carry guns when they are working

2019-8-24 13:03| 发布者: admin| 查看: 80| 评论: 0

简介:Today,some policemen are required to carry guns when they are working.People argue that this would increase the violence in society.In my opinion,while police with guns may lead to some violence,it wo ...
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Today,some policemen are required to carry guns when they are working.People argue that this would increase the violence in society.In my opinion,while police with guns may lead to some violence,it would be lower the levels of violence of society as a whole.

It is true that police with guns seem to cause some incidents of violence.If policemen abuse their guns,for example,when they are going after the escaped prisoner,they may shoot in self-defense.

This may lead to some unfortunate incidents which is should not happen,thus the atmosphere of violence will be strengthened.In addition,If the guns of police are falling in the criminals hand by accident,it may pose a threat to the public,thus the public might suffer the extremely sense of insecurity .

 

However,I admit that carrying guns by police may cause some unnecessary violences,I argue that in general this would lower the levels of violence.Policemen who go on patrol with guns are able to stop crimes as soon as possible.This is because policemen can prevent people from committing crimes when they saw them immediately ,minimizing the damages to society and preventing damage escalation.In addition,police carrying guns would deter the offender from committing offenses,because those criminals  know they will be punished if they disobey the laws.

 

In conclusion,police carrying guns will not increase the levels of violence in the society as long as the government an relevant communities introduce some laws and regulations followed by police.

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