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Medicines save a lot of lives.

2019-11-8 15:39| 发布者: admin| 查看: 18| 评论: 0

简介:Medicines save a lot of lives. In the old days, people believe that cancer is a helpless disease. After decades, there are few cancers which can be healed by taking targeted therapy drugs. This is the ...
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Medicines save a lot of lives. In the old days, people believe that cancer is a helpless disease. After decades, there are few cancers which can be healed by taking targeted therapy drugs. This is the proof of medical researching. However, time consuming on research is huge and it does not work every time. This essay will discuss on this controversial topic.

 On one side, every enterprise needs to be responsible for their shareholders with no doubt. The shareholders invest for revenue, not for education or saving the world. Moreover, company cannot commit investment on research for a long period without a result. The shareholders may not patient enough to keep investing on medical research only. They will stop the investment if there is no profit after years.

 Furthermore, research on medicines is time consuming and failed frequently. Meanwhile, the cost is enormous. AIDS is an incapable of being healed disease. Many companies commit the medical research on it and invest enormous money for decades without any result. This is still an unhealable disease. If a company focuses on research solely without making profits, it will be broken for sure because of the loss expenditure. Companies cannot be operated without money.

 By contrast, a successful research could save lives indeed. Not only the poverty, it saves lives worldwide. Every company has a social responsibility to help the society. As I mentioned before, the targeted therapy drugs for healing cancers is a big success in medical research. Meanwhile, a successful research generates a long term income for the company. Viagra, which treats erectile dysfunction, is one of the drugs that makes a huge profit for years. It proves that a successful research could help the world as well as making money.

 To conclude, every enterprise needs to be responsible for their investors with no doubt. Moreover, research on medicines is time consuming and failed frequently. Most importantly, the cost is enormous. However, I suggest the companies need to make a balance on researching and making money. Although there are few disadvantages on medical research, it helps the poverty as well as the world indeed. A successful research brings a huge profit for the next research and company operation. 

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